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*A non-PDF and edited version of these chapters can be found here > www.fanfiction.net/u/4194347/E… or here > archiveofourown.org/users/Ezri *

Title: Resolution.
Author: Ezri-Krios.
Game: Post Mass Effect.
characters/pairing: FemShep/Thane.
Disclaimer: Everything belongs to Bioware, characters and locations are from the Mass Effect universe.

Resolution.

Thane lives. An unexpected but welcome miracle. Yet it is as bitter-sweet as the time he spent with the warrior-angel who woke him up, and took his heart. Now he has his whole life to give her, yet she cannot be found. When the war ends in victory for the galactic races, Thane is reunited with some familiar faces. Including Admiral Hackett, who has an important mission for them, one which promises to take them further away from finding Shepard. If she isn't already dead, then she is likely in great jeopardy. Despite the team's desire to help locate their old Commander, and Thane's Siha, they must first find out if the Reaper war is really over.

Huge thanks to ~Gigi-FenixPhoenix for the cover design called 'Commander Shepard_Regrets' which is from her collection in the Shepard Series, please go check out Gigi's other work, its awesome. gigi-fenixphoenix.deviantart.c…

This is my first attempt at FanFic and this is Chapter 1 of 13. Please let me know what you think and I hope you enjoy reading this as much as I enjoyed writing it.

Note, everything belongs to Bioware, characters and locations are from the Mass Effect universe.

All 13 chapters are now up and you can find them here - ezri-krios.deviantart.com/gall… :-)
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CommnderShepard117 Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014
I really like this! I just wish my shepard survived the war. I really enjoyed how you created the story after the war in Mass Effect 3. Now the ending to this chapter is very confusing. At first she was fine and then she passed out in pain. Will I find that out in the next chapter? Was this after the "Destroy" ending?
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Ezri-Krios Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer

Thank you, I'm glad your enjoying it so far. Do read on and I promise all will be revealed. :-)


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CommnderShepard117 Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014
great! :)
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Harbiger152 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013
Is there more to this ???
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Ezri-Krios Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer

Yes. All 13 chapters are up - ezri-krios.deviantart.com/gall…

Cheers. :-)

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Harbiger152 Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013
Thank you for the link.
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rlchill Featured By Owner May 12, 2013
im not really computer smart lol, but it says I don't have PDF support in this web browser...so whatever that means lol, is there a place I can read this and all of its chapters?
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Ezri-Krios Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Me either. Which is why I'm stuck using PDF here as nothing else will work.

But it's up 'normally' on ff.net [link] Just scroll down and click on number 2.

Or you can read it on Archive [link]

Let me know if you have any problems. :-) Thanks.
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rlchill Featured By Owner May 12, 2013
omg! I just read the first chapter and omg! I started tearing up! with what Thane was saying, and then w/ Tali :( but I cant WAIT to read more! Lol
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Ezri-Krios Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yay! You found it ok. :boogie:

Sounds like you're off to a great start, I hope you continue to enjoy it as much. If you're already tearing up then I would advise keeping a box of tissues handy for potential tears of all types as you read on. ;-)

Thanks rlchill!
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rlchill Featured By Owner May 14, 2013
oh for sure! lol, its awesome! ur very talented lol...gonna be reading the next chapter here in a bit lol
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Ezri-Krios Featured By Owner May 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :-) Let me know what you think as you continue through the story. Have fun! :highfive:
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OpheliaBell Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Professional Writer
Thane is probably my favorite of all the possible LIs in the game. I was so pissed when he died in the third game. It was expected, of course, but I was still crushed. So naturally I love a good story that lets him live.
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Ezri-Krios Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I probably would have accepted his death if the aftermath had been realistic. But I found the whole game bizzare after that whole death scene. Where had the Role Play in the RPG gone? Even a little cut scene with some sad faces and a turian joke, before Shep pulled herself together to go kick some Reaper butt, would have sufficed.
So yeah, like you I was pretty pissed over the whole thing.
On the upside I wrote Res out of it. :XD:
I hope you enjoy it, and thank you. :-)
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Lootra Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Awe! This is really good my friend. :hug:
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Ezri-Krios Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. I'm really glad you're enjoying it. Thanks for reading. :hug:
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aymenjoe Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
featured [link]
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Ezri-Krios Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :hug:
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Amanda-Graham Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Professional Writer
very well written both descriptive prose and dialogues
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Ezri-Krios Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you Amanda, I'm glad you enjoyed it. :-)
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Vy1956 Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012
Ezri, I was wondering if it would be all right for me to post a link to my Commander Liz Shepard facebook page? I would type the url here, give you credit for writing it and maybe just a first paragraph. just enough to make people want to read on. Would that be all right with you? The page it would be on is "Commander Liz Shepard" on Facebook. I'll wait till I hear back from you. Thought it would be nice to share your work and try to guide more people to read your work. :-)
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Vy1956 Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012
I'll definitely like you, as soon as your Facebook lets me. I've been having weird things happen in FB last couple of days where the pages won't finish loading, the page jumps around and the comments and like ability isn't even on the pages. :-(
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Ezri-Krios Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh tell me about it. It's been a real pain in the ass for days, enough odd stuff happening for me to hear Twilight Zone music in my head every time I go in there. I've had to give up on it a few times. :XD:
I found you anyway, have liked and posted, and got a surprise when I saw Res! Awesome plug, thank you so much Vy.
I owe ya, so holler if I can do anything. :-)
Great page you have.
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Vy1956 Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012
Cool, thank you! I didn't want to do it without asking you first. :-)
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Ezri-Krios Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Go for it. You could just copy and paste the synopsis if you like? (In the notes here, or on my page) I'm Ezri Janeway on FB, so friend me if you want to, be awesome to see you over there.
Cheers Vy. :blowkiss:
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SillyPanda95 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Love it!! Major fan of Thane as well :D
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Ezri-Krios Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah me too, he's def the best character. ;-)

Thank you!
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mypinklipstick Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i wote a message but it seems to have gone :S
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mypinklipstick Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
just wanted to say that i like what i have read so far Ezri,its true not knowing much about Mass Effect made it a little harder for me to get in to but it was clear to me that you have talent! x
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Ezri-Krios Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
OMG, Rosie?? :boogie:
Wow, awesome to see you here. If you want I can give you a run down of ME, with pics, so you have at least an idea of who is who, if you want to read on? S'up to you hun.

Thank you for taking the time to read this. I owe you an extra big hug at the con! :headbang: LLAP!
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mypinklipstick Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i would like that yes, but give me a bit of time and i'll come back to u cus at the mo i am having fun drawing!, something i aint done in agessssssssssssssssss lol x
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Ezri-Krios Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thats aswesome. No worries. If you ever draw any scifi fantasy or horror, we want it. Check out our comp, you MAY want to have a go... :-)
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mypinklipstick Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
ok, thanks i will do! ...tbh drawing not my strong point, just something i do for fun :) x
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Ezri-Krios Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
What I've seen is awesome. Will be great to add some of them to our gallery. ;-)
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hairywookiee Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Okay...this is awesome. This is a guy who reads GRRM and Joe Abercrombie, so sci-fi rarely gets a look-in in my dark and twisted mind, but as a fan of Mass Effect and running a female Shep (which I may have had a small crush on...), this reminds me how much ME dragged me in and wouldn't let go.

Again, just awesome.

:-)
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Ezri-Krios Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, thank you so much. I hope you enjoy reading the rest of Res, and like my FemShep enough to continue that crush. ;-)

Glad to see you joined the Resolution. :lmao:
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Overtall98 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012  Student
oh wow that is good man.... so good that i want to read the rest of the series. :D Great work :D
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Ezri-Krios Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's awesome, thank you.
I hope you continue to enjoy Res. let me know what you think as you read on.
Cheers! :squee:
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Maleiva Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Idem is good.
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Ezri-Krios Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :-)
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redsteven Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2012
wow... this is really very good.
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Ezri-Krios Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. Glad you're enjoying it. :-)
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Vy1956 Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2012
MORE MORE MORE!!!! lol This is great! Usually, I notice grammatical errors and such, but not so much this time. The commas didn't bother me so much because I understood what you were doing with them. The ... is better but I was able to read with Thane's voice and inflections perfectly. All the right voices were there and it was great. I can't wait to read more. :-)
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Ezri-Krios Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's so great to hear Vy, thank you for your feedback. I feel like I'm improving at the moment, :fingerscrossed: and my beta hardly had to make any corrections with Ch4, which will be up this week. I guess the feedback is having a good effect.
I'm glad you understand what I was doing with the commas, but I've been learning to use ... a bit more and trying to make it flow better. See what you think as you read on. I hope you continue to enjoy it.
Thanks so much! :-)
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MEWOAH Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
omg this is so good D: ♥ !!
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Ezri-Krios Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. :-)
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MEWOAH Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem! ^^
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Gigi-FenixPhoenix Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2012
Excellent start. I'm glad Mordin and Thane are alive and, at the same time, I'm a little sad that Tali is dead. But, oh well, we can't have everything, can we?
I think you nailed Thane's speech perfectly. Mordin's as well. I really like where this is going. And I'm glad you're including the chaos of post-war. Plus, you took into consideration all of those that were left stranded, which is also something Bioware's ending decided to ignore.

Now, onto a more constructive note:
You have some minor grammatical errors. At the beginning, for instance, you wrote "heeled" instead of "healed" (during Thane's speech, I think).
Mordin's name was misspelled a few times. You wrote Morden.
There's also some issues with commas that are unneeded. Example: (page 14, 2nd paragraph) "But he also needed to know if he had, failed, those innocent Salarians." The commas before and after failed are unnecessary, it just breaks the flow of the sentence and adds weird pauses.
Another this is that a few times you forgot to add 's to a word and just had it plural. Example: (page 14) "...Thane trusted his instincts, waiting with his finger tightly curled around the rifles trigger..." It should be "rifle's".

Finally, there's sometimes were you switch tenses a little. For example (page 14) "Both deferred to the human who's modified N7 armor was as red as her hair and, she was asking about an assassin?"
In here, you're using who's, which actually means who is. To correct this, you need to use "who'd", however the sentence still reads weird. An option would be something like:
"Both deferred to a human with a modified N7 armor that matched her red hair. She stepped forward and.... was asking about an assassin?"

To have a long, reflective pause, it's better to use ... rather than a coma.

I hope you don't take offense with my critique. I like writing as well (I have my stories in fanfiction.net) and out of all the reviews, I found the critiques the most useful. I think this has a lot of potential and I understand that it's close to impossible for the writer of a piece to spot all mistakes. That's why Beta readers are always so useful :)
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Ezri-Krios Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow! Thank you so much for taking the time to offer this great constructive crit. Have to say I'm squirming at some of those mistakes (head-desk) I did read through many times but after a while it gets a bit 'white noise'. I did look for a beta but the few folks I know who write had no interest in a ME fic so I did the best I could and posted it hoping people will enjoy the story first and foremost but also hoping I might get some pointers.
When Miri mentioned the commas I realised I've been 'thinking' like Thane speaks and using too many. Didn't even spot the dodgy tense! I'll be the first to admit I am not a technically great writer which is why I was after a beta. Mordin/den, unforgivable, gotta apologise for that one. I've had to change Tali from Tally a few times further on as well!
Yeah, hate killing off characters.
I hope the mistakes haven't spoiled the story for anyone and people still enjoy what's to come. But Gigi, thank you so much! Not only have you allowed me to use one of your wonderful designs for my book cover, I now have to thank you again for your very helpful comments. I am very much in your debt!
I'm still trying to find a beta but in the meantime I'll do my best to implement all the crit into Chapter 2 before I submit it in a few days.
Thank you!
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Gigi-FenixPhoenix Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2012
No problem. I'm down to be your beta, already sent you an e-mail. And don't worry, it happens to everyone. It's impossible for a writer to spot mistakes because at some point you stop reading yourself. I mean, you already know what you want to say, so you end up just passing your eyes over the words without really looking at them. I don't know if I make myself clear? Lol.
Anyhow, don't worry! The important thing is to learn and keep growing as a writer :)
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